What is yellow like cheese and it's the colour of the Sun? Butter! The Chipmunks (table group) made butter and went into the bay. We shook and shook it until it leaked. It looked like cheese and when we opened it, it looked like egg. Yum! Yum! Yum! Wow! It tasted nice. "Ew," said Raeleen, "It tastes yuck!' My stomach was rumbling and I felt hungry. Then we finally ate and it was yummy. We ate fresh bread with butter. It tasted like creamy ice-cream. It was delicious
6 comments:
Wow Shalom! I enjoyed reading your writing. It's great to see you using punctuations marks, speech marks and different words like rumbling. I look forward to seeing more of your work posted on your blog.
Miss Lavakula
Hi Shalom,
I enjoyed reading your story because I reckoned that you have re crafted your paragraph.
Well keep up the good work.
By Joshua.( YOUR BROTHER ) RM 17.
Shalom,
Your post really sounded delicious. I have never had homemade butter and bread before but from your description it seems like it would be great! Thank You for sharing.
Betty Cernosek
310 EDM
University of South Alabama
Hi Shalom,
I like your recount. It was great how you started it. I wish we could make butter in our class.
From Isobel in Room 8 at Grey Lynn School.
Hi shalom it looks nice making homemade butter on bread it looks tasty and yummy.
Hi Shalom i enjoyed reading your writing and you should put in some speech marks and keep up your good work. From Zion
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